"I like this place and willingly could waste my time in it." - William Shakespeare

Thursday, September 19, 2013

Autobiographical Writing


The Greenbelt

Stretching for miles in the safe community of Davis, the green belt is a long bike path containing grassy fields, play structures, and work-out stations for those intense soccer moms committed to keeping their cardio training up. But the most important part of the greenbelt to my childhood contained none of these more pleasant qualities of an upper-middle class park. As twelve year olds devoted to the idea of stirring trouble, my friends and I didn’t need much help to find ways to cause chaos and mayhem. Dried twigs and clods of dirt in a meadow the size of a soccer field was all my friends and I required to stay entertained during our seventh grade years, and we found exactly this in the dirt-clod field behind some rarely-used tennis courts on the greenbelt.

During one particular day, my buddy Mike had bought a water-balloon launcher and we quickly began launching the few water balloons we had left before aiming pomegranates at pigeons. We even set up our bikes in line formations and attempted to launch any objects we could find to try and knock them over. It was after Adam’s bike went crashing to the ground that a simultaneous light-bulb went on in all our heads: let’s turn this into a fight. My friends and I quickly divided into two groups, ran to separate ends of the field, placed our bicycles on their kickstands next to each other, and started throwing the dirt-clods at the other team. The goal was to be the first group to knock over all the bicycles of the opposing team with the dirt-clods. Of course, if you ventured too close to the other team, you were liable to get a dirt-clod smacking you in the head. Despite our shoulders getting sore, our clothes getting dirtied, and our skin getting battered and bruised, we couldn’t help laughing and having the time of our lives. After about an hour of an intense battle, the game came to an abrupt halt when Ty hit Adam with what was technically deemed a “pebble” and not a “dirt-clod,” leading to a quick disqualification. But the fun had been had, and for the rest of the day, no bruises or broken bones could ever have wiped those grins off our faces.

Twelve years later, my daily jogs take me by the field as I seem to have been influenced by those soccer moms I thought I never would have emulated. Only now, the field has no more dirt-clods, as green grass has instead grown in, with random flowers and unexpected weeds blooming depending on the season. All my friends have gone their separate ways now, and while we occasionally catch up, most of us have lives of our own that keep us occupied most of the time. When some of my friends do swing by Davis, we might grab a bite to eat, or watch a sports game, but without our bicycles leading the way, there is little reason for us to travel on the greenbelt any longer. I hardly notice it on my runs anymore, but every now and then I turn my head, looking in the direction of the dirt-clod field, and remember those kids with grins on their faces that could have lit up the sky.

Friday, September 13, 2013

Dates Coming Up





Remember:
Read to page 152 of 1984 for Monday, 9/16
Have a typed rough draft of your reflection essay for Wednesday 9/18 (Per 2)/ Thursday 9/19 (Per 1). Must include aspects of experience, personal connection, and universal connection.

Tuesday, September 10, 2013

Then and Now: Autobiographical Writing




Look back into your memories and compare a person or place you remember from back then with your perceptions of the same person or place today. Describe and even or incident with this person/place/ or thing and add vivid details. Here are a few suggestions for subjects, but you may also come up with one of your own:
  • Your backyard when you were a child and now
  • School then and now
  • Your mom/ dad then and now
  • The family car then and now
  • Your childhood hangout spot then and now
  • A close friend or relative then and now
This should be 1-2 pages long.

Saturday, September 7, 2013

Partner Profile Analysis



Answer either in paragraph or bullet point form on a piece of paper stapled to the back of your partner profile:


  • What was your writing process when completing this partner profile?
  • Was this an exhausting experience? Why or why not?
  • Did you take lots of breaks? Listen to music? Eat? Spread out the process? Do it all at once?
  • How did you get started? How did you end it?
  • What part took the most brain power and/or time?

Friday, September 6, 2013

First Character Impressions



During the two minutes of hate, Winston singles out two other workers- a young dark haired woman and a man named O’Brien.

What are his two different opinions about these people he’s actually never spoken to?
Find a quote to support each answer. (p.10-17)
What does this tell us about gender portrayal in the novel?

Wednesday, September 4, 2013

The Four Stages of Editing

First Reading (Verbal):

Author will read the ¶(s) aloud.  “Subject” will listen for accuracy and continuity and, when needed, make suggestions, either orally or directly on the paper.

Accuracy: As you, the “subject,” listen to the ¶, try to pick up on which pieces of information are absolutely essential, which may need elaboration, which might be eliminated, and so on.  Make sure this reflects you honestly. 
 
       Second Reading (Verbal):
 
Continuity:
·Do the details logically flow?  If they do not, what other arrangement/order would get the job done better? 
·What final impression of the writer does the end of the ¶ make?  At the end, if the writing just seems to fade away, suggest a more solid conclusion. 
 
Details, details:
·Provide a title which ties in with the information.  If no title yet exists, make a suggestion; it should not merely be the subject’s name! 
·Incorporate a direct quotation (word, phrase, sentence—anything).  You do not need to limit yourself to just one.
 
  Third Reading (Silent): 

Creativity and word choice:
·Does the writing capture your attention, even with the opening sentence? 
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·Circle the first word of each sentence: see any patterns?  If there are too many “He’s” or “She’s,” or the subject’s name begins every other sentence, suggest ways to work around this ineffective repetition. 
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·Box each verb: see any patterns?  Suggest strong, specific verbs to replace generic ones; make sure the verbs are in the same tense throughout.
 
Fourth Reading (Silent):
 
         What sentences could use more substance? (are there really short sentences that could be combined with parallel structure?)
What sentences are overpacked and go on too long?
Is there any passive voice in the piece? How can you flip it?
Any other examples of redundancy? One word being repeated too often?
 

Tuesday, September 3, 2013

Partner Profile


Use the interview questions to compose one or two glorified paragraphs (8-16 sentences) describing the writing process of your partner.

Come up with a title for the piece and use the tips from our effective sentences (along with your own creativity) to write a gripping and possibly dramatic piece on how your partner produces an essay.

Must have a quote. Choose third or first person. Don't be afraid to embellish and get creative.

Typed up rough draft due tomorrow 9/4. Typed final draft due Friday 9/6

This is worth 50 points (10 for rough draft, 40 for final draft).